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Teenage Filmstar- 10-18-2007
Echo's crappy poem! =D
I'm proud of my poem ¬_¬ Who else likes it? read & review people. Read & review.... He sits in his room for hours on end He’s got his guitar, a Gibson Les Paul He won’t leave it alone – his only friend His parents fight, his mother’s a drunk He’s tried to commit suicide ‘Cos that kid – he’s junk ‘He ain’t no good’ He’s heard people say But that kid – he thinks How do you get love that way? His parents fight, his mother’s a drunk He’s tried to commit suicide ‘Cos that kid – he’s junk He writes songs about corporations He talks of war and hate Can’t live up to the expectations Of cats like Hendrix & Lennon He wrote a song for a girl he liked She heard him out but laughed in his face How that boy cried that night Into the pillow he desperately embraced His parents fight, his mother’s a drunk He’s tried to commit suicide ‘Cos that kid – he’s junk He took his guitar and he sat in his room There’s nothing out there but sad and gloom Writing songs for the girl he loves His heart ain’t been broken enough His parents fight, his mother’s a drunk He’s tried to commit suicide ‘Cos that kid – he’s junk And that girl he likes She thinks he’s weird She thinks he’s strange She don’t give a damn if he can’t change His parents fight, his mother’s a drunk He’s tried to commit suicide ‘Cos that kid – he’s junk His father hits him with a belt ‘Cos he chose music over sports ‘You ain’t nothin’ but junk’ His mother comes in, surprise! she’s drunk He goes upstairs into his room His guitar lies on the bed He plays it one last time That boy – he’s dead He hung himself from the ceiling From a noose made of rope He sang his last tune, that boy About love and hope Next to his guitar is a small note ‘I never asked for anything And I took all you gave You all had your problems – that I could see But I just wanted a song written for me’ So my guitar boy Here is your tune A song from my heart I will always love you His parents fight, his mother’s a drunk He’s committed suicide ‘Cos that kid – he thought he was junk. HAPPY POEM!!

DecayingFlower- 10-18-2007

Pretty good, although I'm not a poem person.

Bryantjj- 10-18-2007

Wow, Echo... That's... pretty intense. But, if I may ask, is this about who I think it is?

Teenage Filmstar- 10-18-2007

I have no idea who I think you think it is..... but it's not about anyone

Bryantjj- 10-18-2007

Okay, I'm glad :) Anyway, Echo, it's a good poem. Intense, yet well writen.

Teenage Filmstar- 10-19-2007

Thank you :)

JamesXXXIII- 10-26-2007

thats very good and i know how hard poems are

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